New chapter in ‘I Was’ story

http://mypriorlife.wordpress.com/2013/02/18/i-was3-hello-ladies/

This was a tough chapter, it’s short but I had to convey the feelings of other characters. Took me a long time to get where it is and it still doesn’t feel right.

One of the things I struggled with was how would I be able to talk about a scene where the character telling the story wasn’t present? I think I may have come up with a way but it’s really up to you, the reader to tell me if I was successful.

PLEASE comment. I may as well print out hard copies and toss them down a well for all the feed back I get.

Thanks and I hope you enjoy it.

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